Comments on Out of Order Alice: Gratuitously

Ha!That was just great!! Oh, she is a mischievous ...

2010-07-17T12:46:09.550-04:00

Ha!That was just great!! Oh, she is a mischievous one! I LOVE your characters.

I was laughing from the first para because of the moose head. I grew up in a large old house that had a rumpus room (yeah, really called that) - it was a large room over the double garage that still had many things from the previous family (strange, but true, even after many years) there was a pool table, ping pong table, and several taxidermy animals (really weird we kept them as long as we did - what were my parents thinking) - the one that scared me the most as a child was a huge moose head like your pic. I believe they are spooky, mysterious & evil, even without help.

I know this isn't a particularly helpful or in...

2010-07-13T20:43:30.224-04:00

I know this isn't a particularly helpful or insightful comment, but that was freakin' brilliant!

Why, thank you very much, Shrinky (how much do I l...

2010-07-13T18:45:03.676-04:00

Why, thank you very much, Shrinky (how much do I love your name? Very!).

Lovely to meet you and welcome :)

Ooooooooooh, you really had me there, you wicked w...

2010-07-13T18:37:01.893-04:00

Ooooooooooh, you really had me there, you wicked woman, you! Absolutely wonderful (still smiling), now that's what I call my kinda' girl!

Hahaha! I should've figured you'd kill som...

2010-07-13T14:50:35.958-04:00

Hahaha! I should've figured you'd kill someone off. The Moose Head is a great murder weapon. I liked how the tone went from light sorrow and gradually got more menacing as the widow's dissatisfaction came to light.

CD

You start with "This stuff is going to kill h...

2010-07-13T10:32:29.841-04:00

You start with "This stuff is going to kill him" and end somewhere much more grim & clever. Oh dear. Hell hath no fury like a woman with a bunch of freaking junk in her house. (I know this to be true!)

When I saw the moose head I thought of that rester...

2010-07-12T12:49:17.892-04:00

When I saw the moose head I thought of that resterant you know. MONTANAS!
MR FRICK XD

Oh. My. God. That was beautifully executed (oops,...

2010-07-11T21:03:36.082-04:00

Oh. My. God.

That was beautifully executed (oops, pardon the pun).

I could sense Martha's irritation with her husband's new-found activity and there was a subtle hint in the mention of the return to his "childhood home".

But your ending is just gorgeous (in a homicidal way, of course).

Superb.

Thank you Analisa! You are so very kind. Am so hap...

2010-07-11T15:56:54.235-04:00

Thank you Analisa! You are so very kind. Am so happy you enjoy the stories and appreciate your reading them.

Nice twist. I love your stories. I hope you consid...

2010-07-11T15:09:16.910-04:00

Nice twist. I love your stories. I hope you consider doing a book of short stories. I imagine reading them on the subway. :)

That last line was brilliant. Even though it was a...

2010-07-11T11:04:10.954-04:00

That last line was brilliant. Even though it was a sick and twisted thing to do to her husband, I couldn't help but smile.

Until you have seen a moose head up close, you don't realize just how big they are. Makes me wonder if it was a closed casket service.

Well done

Thank you all for taking the time to read this sto...

2010-07-11T07:45:18.225-04:00

Thank you all for taking the time to read this story and comment. I appreciate it so much and am very glad you liked it!

great ending. loved the trash treasure theme.

2010-07-11T04:18:07.556-04:00

great ending. loved the trash treasure theme.

Who'd have thought dear old Martha was a crimi...

2010-07-10T22:57:28.447-04:00

Who'd have thought dear old Martha was a criminal genius! Initially I thought this was going to be a short 'twilight of their lives' eulogy thing ... only you gave us something so much more. Very cool.

Whoa, not been got like that for a long time. I wa...

2010-07-10T16:48:44.558-04:00

Whoa, not been got like that for a long time. I was browsing a few blogs via Valerie/candleinsunshine so, sorry to say, you didn't have my full attention. That'll teach me.

http://www.nydailynews.com/news/2009/12/30/2009-12...

2010-07-10T16:45:00.917-04:00

http://www.nydailynews.com/news/2009/12/30/2009-12-30_duck_duck_moose_woman_sues_eatery_after_it_falls_hits_her.html

Death by moose -- I've heard of that. Very, ve...

2010-07-10T16:27:29.860-04:00

Death by moose -- I've heard of that. Very, very dangerous, that yard sale stuff. Excellent story! Made my day. :)

*gigglesnort*

What a wonderful twist! All the best with your wri...

2010-07-10T15:37:19.918-04:00

What a wonderful twist! All the best with your writing.

Loved the ending. You really had me going there. I...

2010-07-10T14:18:38.621-04:00

Loved the ending. You really had me going there. I was feeling her pain and trying not to be amused because of how the husband died. Moose heads are huge. I knew someone who was a hunter and saw one up close. Kind of intimidating really. Great read and excellent twist at the end. Bravo!

Fiendishly delightful, Marisa... Hilarious. ;)

2010-07-10T14:11:30.345-04:00

Fiendishly delightful, Marisa... Hilarious. ;)

Awesome! Perfectly wicked! Loved it!

2010-07-10T12:15:03.334-04:00

Awesome! Perfectly wicked! Loved it!

Loved the end. I was reading along...thinking oh, ...

2010-07-10T11:30:03.622-04:00

Loved the end. I was reading along...thinking oh, when everyone says "let me know what I can do" [like at EVERY wake I've ever attended]...she was going to make each of them take away a "treasure" on their way out.

The denouement turning out to be that she had murdered him with the Moose was just SOO much better....

You rock Marisa.
:0)

Yikes! Moose kill a lot of people here every year ...

2010-07-10T06:52:43.096-04:00

Yikes! Moose kill a lot of people here every year as well. Except they're in their cars, on the highway...I liked the reverend, and here reaction. Well done, Marisa!

Great laugh, Marisa, really good story. Loved her ...

2010-07-10T05:25:17.930-04:00

Great laugh, Marisa, really good story. Loved her snickering at the vicar.

Hi Marisa, Loved the story, it had great pace and ...

2010-07-10T05:08:25.297-04:00

Hi Marisa, Loved the story, it had great pace and momentum, wonderful humour, real laugh out loud moment at the end. Love the idea that she no longer has to pander to his eccentricities and can be where she wants to. Very enjoyable.