Comments on Out of Order Alice: Wet Foot, Dry Foot

Oh, so sad. Saved by the water, doomed by it too. ...

2010-07-03T20:03:46.897-04:00

Oh, so sad. Saved by the water, doomed by it too. My sister lives in DC, and I've been to the Great Falls several times. Many people ignore those signs every year, to tragic consequences. Such beauty, and such grief.
~jon

I live in the area. Gaithersburg. So I saw this sa...

2010-06-27T20:58:07.669-04:00

I live in the area. Gaithersburg. So I saw this sad news story about the family members that parished in the Potomac. I hope it is the last one. Nicely written.

Excellent bookends. I wish it had ended more happi...

2010-06-25T07:18:21.043-04:00

Excellent bookends. I wish it had ended more happily for them.

Yes, as emma says - that comparison, and the hope ...

2010-06-20T10:28:46.061-04:00

Yes, as emma says - that comparison, and the hope in one and the despair in the other ...

Tragic yes, but beautifully told and the connectio...

2010-06-19T11:39:59.093-04:00

Tragic yes, but beautifully told and the connection you made with your characters, however brief was very satisfying.

Sparse but full at the same time. I feel for Beba ...

2010-06-18T21:38:09.697-04:00

Sparse but full at the same time. I feel for Beba and Maria. Great story, aged well this week! Peace...

I thought this packed a lot of punch. Something in...

2010-06-16T13:14:15.727-04:00

I thought this packed a lot of punch. Something in the tone of the delivery -- almost casual in the description of the slip and fall and subsequent rescue attempt -- made the tragic ending more tragic still. You added weight by ... not adding any weight via voice.

Amazing bit of work. Amazing.

So tragic, but I love the circular aspect of this....

2010-06-15T22:18:30.148-04:00

So tragic, but I love the circular aspect of this... how it starts with a leap into water and ends with another. Same reasons but different ending. Wonderfully told.

Short and yet it carries a wide range of emotions....

2010-06-14T09:41:46.624-04:00

Short and yet it carries a wide range of emotions. I like it!

Very sad story. The two jumps, both out of very di...

2010-06-13T23:15:33.700-04:00

Very sad story. The two jumps, both out of very different kinds of desperation. Nicely done.

Wonderful story Mari-girl! You manage to put muc...

2010-06-13T21:46:24.134-04:00

Wonderful story Mari-girl!

You manage to put much emotion into such short pieces. The irony of their fates is something that rings too true. So sad. Well done! :)

Interesting how the same action can have such diff...

2010-06-13T17:33:25.013-04:00

Interesting how the same action can have such different outcomes when used in different situations. So sad.

You manage to pack your flashes with so much detai...

2010-06-13T00:06:57.239-04:00

You manage to pack your flashes with so much detail and emotion. Always an enjoyable touch.

Sad and ironic. Your story reminded me of Jose Gut...

2010-06-12T16:41:19.424-04:00

Sad and ironic. Your story reminded me of Jose Gutierrez, a Guatemalan immigrant, who came to America, enlisted in the Marines and was killed in Iraq. After death, he earned his citizenship. What good does it do then?

The hardships that people (all people) endure. That's the heart break. ~ Olivia

Water and danger overlapping, intermingling. Your...

2010-06-12T12:16:12.989-04:00

Water and danger overlapping, intermingling. Your story opens in hope and ends in tragedy.

Heartbreaking and unexpected... I was surprised th...

2010-06-12T11:20:27.140-04:00

Heartbreaking and unexpected... I was surprised they successfully made land in the first part. It's really a crazy law - requiring people to risk their lives even more than they have already in order to walk ashore.

Fantastic (and sad) irony here, Marisa. I hadn'...

2010-06-12T07:56:24.841-04:00

Fantastic (and sad) irony here, Marisa. I hadn't thought of it, but Marc noted the contrast between the sizes of the waters and their untimate effects on the women's lives. Great story.

It gets me thinking about a show (60 minutes?) on TV recently about the deaths of hundred of Mexicans trying to illegally cross the 'All-American' canal in S. California.

Life can keep us off guard and not ever knowing wh...

2010-06-12T07:22:11.316-04:00

Life can keep us off guard and not ever knowing what to expect, right?

Sad story Marissa!:-(

Very poignant...Lovely stuff.

2010-06-12T06:14:04.408-04:00

Very poignant...Lovely stuff.

Perceptive and layered. Well-done.

2010-06-12T00:00:22.275-04:00

Perceptive and layered. Well-done.

Ditto Ronda. It's one of the things I like abo...

2010-06-11T23:01:46.416-04:00

Ditto Ronda. It's one of the things I like about Melville: what nature gives with one hand she takes away with the other.

Fate can be cruel. Maybe I read too much into thi...

2010-06-11T20:30:14.671-04:00

Fate can be cruel. Maybe I read too much into this but I saw some "the grass is always greener" symbolism here. I enjoyed this.

Hmmm, from that first line you derived so much. Th...

2010-06-11T18:56:54.995-04:00

Hmmm, from that first line you derived so much. The fates are an interesting subject.

Good story. Sad how they went, and sad for Uncle M...

2010-06-11T17:08:01.067-04:00

Good story. Sad how they went, and sad for Uncle Mario.

heart-breaking...but well-written!

2010-06-11T16:14:07.732-04:00

heart-breaking...but well-written!