Comments on Out of Order Alice: Alfresco

Thanks, Marisa. For all you do, all you write. Sen...

2010-09-22T21:20:27.103-04:00

Thanks, Marisa. For all you do, all you write. Sending it to you in order to cover all the bases if others haven't. http://wp.me/pQy5t-8c

Omigosh, Marisa, you can't leave us hanging! W...

2010-09-20T03:56:14.207-04:00

Omigosh, Marisa, you can't leave us hanging! What did the guy do to the bear to make it so mad? Yikes!

We knew, didn't we .... from the beginning tha...

2010-09-19T13:52:08.084-04:00

We knew, didn't we .... from the beginning that something was going to happen. But How? and To whom? had us all holding our breath and cowering. You know how to get a captive audience Marisa!

Well done! Love the "bag of thawed hamburger...

2010-09-19T10:45:12.154-04:00

Well done! Love the "bag of thawed hamburger" description. Vivid!

The thought of meeting any bear in the woods (poss...

2010-09-18T11:52:18.401-04:00

The thought of meeting any bear in the woods (possibly with the exception of Baloo, or Pooh) gives me the shivers.

I hope Sylvia can punch harder than Mike Tyson. :D

Of course when I was younger, Marisa, I could have...

2010-09-13T05:04:50.196-04:00

Of course when I was younger, Marisa, I could have taken that bear with no problem! But, now that I'm 60 ...

I don't camp, Marisa... This is one of the rea...

2010-09-12T01:23:11.091-04:00

I don't camp, Marisa... This is one of the reasons ;)

... and THAT is why you don't pack up until mo...

2010-09-11T14:02:23.563-04:00

... and THAT is why you don't pack up until morning. But you DO hang your food in a tree. Poor Andy, unless it's him up the tree and the food down below...

Excellent storytelling. Leaving us hanging there a...

2010-09-11T00:36:06.528-04:00

Excellent storytelling. Leaving us hanging there at the end was brilliant. We can all decide for ourselves how it ends. Good story!

Marisa, Thanks for dropping by my blog. Wow, I ho...

2010-09-10T20:57:20.465-04:00

Marisa, Thanks for dropping by my blog. Wow, I hope poor Sylvia was okay. If the others are playing a trick on her I hope she unpacks the skillet and gets busy.

Marisa - shame on you - hightailing it out of ther...

2010-09-10T19:57:39.023-04:00

Marisa - shame on you - hightailing it out of there and leaving poor Sylvia to fend for herself ;-) Great story!

Yikes! And I like that you ended it just this way....

2010-09-10T16:37:48.953-04:00

Yikes! And I like that you ended it just this way. It makes the tension scream.

Excellent horrifying story!

I never liked camping, since I was in Boy Scouts. ...

2010-09-10T16:24:04.235-04:00

I never liked camping, since I was in Boy Scouts. I always thought there was a bear or some other horrible thing outside my tent. After reading this story I will never even think of camping again.

Good story!

New rule, never pack until your actually ready t...

2010-09-10T15:47:39.054-04:00

New rule, never pack until your *actually* ready to leave. Would the bear even come into the tent? I for one have no intention of trying to find out!

Awesome! And I'm so not going camping again. n...

2010-09-10T15:41:58.794-04:00

Awesome! And I'm so not going camping again. nope. :D

Great Stuff, Marisa! Edge of the seat and chill bu...

2010-09-10T15:27:16.074-04:00

Great Stuff, Marisa! Edge of the seat and chill bumps kind of great. Love it!

Woah! So precariously on the edge of my seat I may...

2010-09-10T15:03:34.332-04:00

Woah! So precariously on the edge of my seat I may well fall off!

Thawed hamburger? Ew. Remind me never to punch a b...

2010-09-10T15:00:12.130-04:00

Thawed hamburger? Ew. Remind me never to punch a bear.

Like everyone else I really want to know. Did she get the bear? Did the bear get her?

Ooohh.. that last line really sent a shiver down m...

2010-09-10T14:57:25.710-04:00

Ooohh.. that last line really sent a shiver down my spine. Never been camping much but you really brought it to life!

ACK! I thought for sure they were playing a joke o...

2010-09-10T14:49:52.965-04:00

ACK! I thought for sure they were playing a joke on poor Sylvia, but I guess not, huh?

I've been there - we were camping (when I was around 8 years old) when a bear came snooping around our tent. I took a big breath to scream and my dad put his hand over my mouth and shushed me. We sat still as stone for about ten minutes before the bear walked away. It IS scary!

Good edge-of-your-seat story Marisa!

At least one of them remember what to do. I love ...

2010-09-10T14:22:43.347-04:00

At least one of them remember what to do.

I love how you created this. The eeriness of Andy's campire warning, followed by the eventual attack was scarier than any crazed killer tale.

Hey, bears like to dine out sometimes too, y'k...

2010-09-10T13:54:41.206-04:00

Hey, bears like to dine out sometimes too, y'know.

Great work on this. Even if I saw it coming, that ending was so well worded and delivered it made me smile ear to ear.

Fantastic work, I thought. A fun piece even as it chills to think of the scenario. I know that's hard to understand but you did a magnificent bit of work with a chilling piece.

Kat, that story really was chilling, especially si...

2010-09-10T13:17:35.926-04:00

Kat, that story really was chilling, especially since it's true! And to have it recorded for others to know what happened to them!!!

Lawd! This made me think of something true that h...

2010-09-10T13:12:42.533-04:00

Lawd! This made me think of something true that happened - this guy wanted to "live among the bears" (Drives me crazy when people do this with wild animals . . .)... so, he does and convinces his new girlfriend to join him - she's in the tent getting the cam-corder thing ready so they can record their frolicking with the bears ....

Then, she hears it - his screaming -

Later the authorities find the camcorder and they can see her, then hear his screams and the bears grunts and growls - they see her run outside and then hear her screams --
at any rate, um, that's the last of them - screams stop . . .

*shudder* -- when are people gonna learn that wild animals are not our pets and not cute and are unpredictable?

so you didnt' ask for that story, did you? LAUGH!
Love your writing ....

Wait... Are you kidding me?!?!? I was going to go...

2010-09-10T13:01:53.846-04:00

Wait... Are you kidding me?!?!?
I was going to go camping this weekend! What next? What next?