tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post469006585995469733..comments2024-03-28T05:24:32.303-04:00Comments on Out of Order Alice: MondayMarisa Birnshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17945909737147497606noreply@blogger.comBlogger29125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-2758650770320128302020-08-17T05:35:53.023-04:002020-08-17T05:35:53.023-04:00The agency follows a strict selection procedure an...<br />The agency follows a strict selection procedure and each and every female interested in joining us need to meet the essential conditions and fulfill the eligibility criteria<a href="http://www.aerocitydelhiescorts.com/" rel="nofollow">Call Girls in Aerocity</a>we have and There is a long list of elite customers who has blind faith in us. It is because of the uncompromising terms and conditions that we strictly follow to ensure highest level of privacy. Check our other Services...<br /><a href="http://www.aerocitydelhiescorts.com/air-hostess-call-girls-aerocity-delhi/" rel="nofollow">Air Hostess Call Girls in Aerocity</a><br /><a href="http://www.aerocitydelhiescorts.com/air-hostess-escorts-aerocity-delhi-area/" rel="nofollow">Air Hostess Escorts in Aerocity</a><br /><a href="http://www.aerocitydelhiescorts.com/category/call-girls/" rel="nofollow">Call Girls in Aerocity</a><br /><a href="http://www.aerocitydelhiescorts.com/tag/5-star-hotels/" rel="nofollow">Book Call Girls in all 5 Star Hotels in Aerocity</a><br /><a href="http://www.aerocityincall%E2%80%8B.com/call-girls%E2%80%8B-service-aeroci%E2%80%8Bty.html" rel="nofollow">Aerocity Call Girls</a><br /><a href="http://www.aerocityincall.com/" rel="nofollow">Aerocity Escorts Service</a><br /><a href="http://www.aerocityincall.com/air-hostess-escorts-delhi-aerocity.html" rel="nofollow">Air Hostess Escorts in Aerocity</a><br /><a href="http://www.aerocityincall.com/blog/tag/5-star-hotels/" rel="nofollow">Call Girls in 5 Star Hotels in Aerocity</a><br />sweta singhhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15173010192284633681noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-16036714211329627072009-11-12T21:04:29.255-05:002009-11-12T21:04:29.255-05:00Wonderfully written Marisa. So very sad. I also li...Wonderfully written Marisa. So very sad. I also liked the description of the tie as a tongue. Hopefully it will strangle him later on :)Lily Mulhollandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09804113718224654006noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-39646887203808154592009-11-10T02:34:00.844-05:002009-11-10T02:34:00.844-05:00The homeless guy and his importance in her life is...The homeless guy and his importance in her life is a touching piece of this flash fiction.dan powellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14131553102349479513noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-12341853084426590782009-11-09T19:09:44.133-05:002009-11-09T19:09:44.133-05:00Very well written. I wonder if Homeless Reggie kno...Very well written. I wonder if Homeless Reggie knows or cares how much his weekly comment means to her?Eric J. Krausehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774468607814244185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-45613072494482010072009-11-09T17:45:00.201-05:002009-11-09T17:45:00.201-05:00Your tone was excellent and I loved the minimal bu...Your tone was excellent and I loved the minimal but fantastic descriptions.Danahttp://pixelenvy.ca/cgi/fff.cginoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-51409089815100577792009-11-08T13:55:39.707-05:002009-11-08T13:55:39.707-05:00Lovely. I really liked the bit about Homeless Reg...Lovely. I really liked the bit about Homeless Reggie. Well done.Cat Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14160039271069426174noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-71303716770156222302009-11-08T05:39:11.096-05:002009-11-08T05:39:11.096-05:00Very nicely done. I too am a fan of the reflection...Very nicely done. I too am a fan of the reflection part, and of the homeless chapmazzz_in_Leedshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01498100483681096442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-87433731450994074422009-11-06T22:19:17.168-05:002009-11-06T22:19:17.168-05:00Sad and lovely. I too thought he speaking to her ...Sad and lovely. I too thought he speaking to her reflection was wonderful. This is a great one.<br />~chrisChris Chartrandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09766438158698041660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-79021597892974025782009-11-06T22:00:31.308-05:002009-11-06T22:00:31.308-05:00Pass the Kleenex... Heartrending piece. I liked th...Pass the Kleenex... Heartrending piece. I liked the way you wove Homeless Reggie into her sad tale. Loved the line about the silk tie as narrow as his tongue. Peace, LindaLindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01110078016784294934noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-4846299464533241222009-11-06T21:38:45.177-05:002009-11-06T21:38:45.177-05:00Hi, Marisa,
Alex & I just read this story and ...Hi, Marisa,<br />Alex & I just read this story and enjoyed it very much. Excellent mood piece! Homeless Reggie serves 2 important literary purposes: shows observation & attention to detail; brings & true-to-life element. Another purpose is to show how tiny acts of kindness carry us through hard times.<br /><br />Well done.<br />Donna CarrickDonna Carrickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13328714849719887970noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-7237005106455271642009-11-06T20:06:33.998-05:002009-11-06T20:06:33.998-05:00Wonderful and heartfelt.Wonderful and heartfelt.https://www.blogger.com/profile/09492062472206579391noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-82885303005216089242009-11-06T19:41:41.608-05:002009-11-06T19:41:41.608-05:00It's incredible that you've created THREE ...It's incredible that you've created THREE really compelling characters in this short piece ... Reggie, your main character and her lover. Oh, the birds, too. They're a great addition. What sparked my interest even further was that the main character in my Nanowrimo novel is/was involved with a married man. There's so much to tell there! Great flash! Thanks for sharing.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-72765228299175571092009-11-06T19:41:39.457-05:002009-11-06T19:41:39.457-05:00It's incredible that you've created THREE ...It's incredible that you've created THREE really compelling characters in this short piece ... Reggie, your main character and her lover. Oh, the birds, too. They're a great addition. What sparked my interest even further was that the main character in my Nanowrimo novel is/was involved with a married man. There's so much to tell there! Great flash! Thanks for sharing.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-46608955241671792492009-11-06T19:30:31.218-05:002009-11-06T19:30:31.218-05:00Sad and beautiful. I like that bit with the mirror...Sad and beautiful. I like that bit with the mirror too.~Timhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06774944172261988587noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-25203645699097337632009-11-06T18:23:07.744-05:002009-11-06T18:23:07.744-05:00The colors are outstanding. The descriptions of th...The colors are outstanding. The descriptions of the colors are otherworldly! I really enjoyed this well thought-out piece. Terrific work.Carrie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05093923008179106837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-41402525783517434592009-11-06T17:49:45.565-05:002009-11-06T17:49:45.565-05:00Ah yes, the unhappy patterns that women fall into!...Ah yes, the unhappy patterns that women fall into! You could extend this into a longer piece. I could see how she would use this low-point to make changes in her life, and in her taste in men. <br /><br />Nice work :)Debhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17777178044868827470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-11200417505776645842009-11-06T16:17:04.032-05:002009-11-06T16:17:04.032-05:00The truest part of this was that he couldn't l...The truest part of this was that he couldn't look at her. The imagery of the mirror gave the story a whole other level. Well done!Amyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01304850820653245569noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-65534164370171397512009-11-06T16:12:23.147-05:002009-11-06T16:12:23.147-05:00A lovely tale, with beautifully drawn details and ...A lovely tale, with beautifully drawn details and images: the cardinals against the gray next to her smiles through tears, and these next to the irresistible Reggie - they all reflect each other. Gosh, that's nicely done.Mark Kerstetterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13307987573435067415noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-78203035031933651772009-11-06T16:01:20.445-05:002009-11-06T16:01:20.445-05:00You've skillfully painted the portrait of a lo...You've skillfully painted the portrait of a lost woman here, one who needs validation and self-confidence even if it comes from a stranger. I sense daddy issues. Wonderful imagery, now I'm sad.shannon espositohttp://murderinparadise.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-84401964011380357852009-11-06T15:34:02.563-05:002009-11-06T15:34:02.563-05:00Nicely described story, loved all the elements men...Nicely described story, loved all the elements mentioned almost in passing but which are very important.<br /><br />Talking to her reflection was the most striking to me, as if she wasn't even worth facing...Estrella Azulhttp://bit.ly/30V5hAnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-79954400300934995222009-11-06T14:16:46.445-05:002009-11-06T14:16:46.445-05:00I liked the Homeless Reggie character as well. A n...I liked the Homeless Reggie character as well. A nice 'slice of life' couple of scenes. <br /><br />I also liked the image of the girl in the photo with the white, lacy frock and antique cap.Alan W. Davidsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17067022519729701245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-86532538104093806702009-11-06T13:46:19.639-05:002009-11-06T13:46:19.639-05:00Someone commented earlier about her now ex-lover b...Someone commented earlier about her now ex-lover breaking up with her while he looked at her reflection in the mirror. That struck me so powerfully as I read it. Metaphorically it's incredibly rich. I find myself wanting to know a lot more about...everything. :) Would love to hear more.Melissahttp://windspirit-girl.livejournal.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-38055616849884951402009-11-06T12:58:19.655-05:002009-11-06T12:58:19.655-05:00Some great images in this piece. I want to know mo...Some great images in this piece. I want to know more about the protagonist - and about Homeless Reggie.<br /><br />Helen<br /><a href="http://straightfromhel.blogspot.com" rel="nofollow">Straight From Hel</a>Helen Gingerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09794759602654727110noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-56308537768814465422009-11-06T12:07:39.654-05:002009-11-06T12:07:39.654-05:00It is sad, and well done. The rain, the homeless m...It is sad, and well done. The rain, the homeless man, talking to her reflection... all built the mood perfectly.<br />~jonJ. M. Strotherhttp://jmstrother.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32297227.post-7114767483160775012009-11-06T10:56:18.205-05:002009-11-06T10:56:18.205-05:00"He looked in the mirror while he dressed, an..."He looked in the mirror while he dressed, and spoke to her reflection as he knotted the tie she never liked: a pink silk that was as thin as a tongue."<br /><br />I love the idea of this. Him speaking to her reflection, but looking at himself. That speaks VOLUMES about their relationship.<br /><br />lovely piece.<br />Karen :0)Karen from Mentorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03685540761526680384noreply@blogger.com