Comments on Out of Order Alice: The Woods

Nice! I agree with Carrie - XFiles vibes :)

2010-02-07T14:11:12.070-05:00

Nice! I agree with Carrie - XFiles vibes :)

Wow, this is a well-told story! I like the huntin...

2010-02-07T11:06:14.653-05:00

Wow, this is a well-told story! I like the hunting references. I half-thought you were going t use the hunting metaphor during his capture -- maybe have him hit by a sniper rifle... But the ending you chose keeps the humanity and sadness much more in the forefront.

Very nice!

Wow, great writing. Intense. It hooked me from the...

2010-02-03T16:15:32.454-05:00

Wow, great writing. Intense. It hooked me from the get go.

Thanks, too, for your nice comments at Ronda's place. Appreciate that. Looking forward to more of your work.

I want to read the rest of the book that is attach...

2010-02-03T13:17:47.291-05:00

I want to read the rest of the book that is attached to this post! Excellent!

Very interesting. Surprised at the end. I like t...

2010-02-02T21:00:52.434-05:00

Very interesting. Surprised at the end. I like the way you've written this piece. Also, I love you're Our of Order Alice heading/description. It made me want to come in and check things out.

This is so funny in the truest sense that humor al...

2010-02-02T18:39:00.922-05:00

This is so funny in the truest sense that humor almost always comes from some kind of hurt. In a sick way, I'm kinda glad he finally bested his brothers.

Thanks for visiting my blog today. Yours is terrific and I'll be back.

At first I was a bit confused with the helicopter ...

2010-02-02T16:58:09.854-05:00

At first I was a bit confused with the helicopter reference, but the explanation and the story's development totally hooked me. Great one Marisa! :)

An unexpected ending. After the violence, I though...

2010-02-02T08:50:37.555-05:00

An unexpected ending. After the violence, I thought it would end in violence, too.

Helen
Straight From Hel

It astonishes me you have all these stories in you...

2010-02-02T03:25:50.649-05:00

It astonishes me you have all these stories in your head. I can barely scrape up my novel ideas??

Good stuff, Marisa!

Corra

from the desk of a writer

Those voices make mine look like the Golden Girls,...

2010-02-01T13:42:06.051-05:00

Those voices make mine look like the Golden Girls, most of the time.
Very nice writing with a good finish.

Cracking opening, with a great use of narrative st...

2010-02-01T06:14:37.765-05:00

Cracking opening, with a great use of narrative style to hint at the diction and voice of the character. Good stuff.

I enjoyed this story very much. I too was expecti...

2010-01-31T07:16:35.979-05:00

I enjoyed this story very much. I too was expecting him to go out in a blaze of glory, or to shoot himself. Hopefully the fact he didn't means there may be a sequel to this story, right?

Very, very powerful. Thanks for sharing it.

2010-01-30T21:19:09.250-05:00

Very, very powerful. Thanks for sharing it.

In spite of his insanity, it seems to me he wanted...

2010-01-30T16:18:46.468-05:00

In spite of his insanity, it seems to me he wanted to stay alive so he could get "credit" for what he had done ... very creepy!

Great pacing. Very intense. I was expecting a dif...

2010-01-30T11:24:23.654-05:00

Great pacing. Very intense. I was expecting a different ending. But this one leaves room to hope he gets some help.

Great job!

I was also thinking X-Files while reading, very in...

2010-01-30T05:57:09.551-05:00

I was also thinking X-Files while reading, very interesting way of making us feel sorry for a killer :)

Billy Parker isn't someone I'd care to mee...

2010-01-29T23:35:45.964-05:00

Billy Parker isn't someone I'd care to meet. Good job.

Love the fact he didn't die in the end. Chill...

2010-01-29T20:56:33.346-05:00

Love the fact he didn't die in the end. Chilling and realistic. Great piece.

Like a shot of whiskey, good stuff.

2010-01-29T19:26:14.439-05:00

Like a shot of whiskey, good stuff.

I loved the voice in this, particularly, 'I fi...

2010-01-29T19:14:09.180-05:00

I loved the voice in this, particularly, 'I finally bagged me something big.'

The Piggly Wiggly is such a fantastic name too!

Really enjoyed reading this and could really imagine the whole scene. Great!

There is something about your writing voice that h...

2010-01-29T16:45:34.100-05:00

There is something about your writing voice that has a real lilt to it - the little reading voice in my head sounds American. Seeing as I am most definitely British, that's a surprise to me and real compliment to you!

This seems ripped from the headlines, it's so ...

2010-01-29T15:29:01.918-05:00

This seems ripped from the headlines, it's so authentic. Especially Billy's voice. I do believe you nailed this characterization. I didn't real feel sorry for him, though. I was kindof hoping he would shoot himself in the end. Well told!

Expertly written with careful precision. The myst...

2010-01-29T14:56:40.285-05:00

Expertly written with careful precision.

The mystery builds up well with gradually increasing tension and avoids falling into melodrama.

Can we here more about the goings on at the Piggly Wiggly sometime?

Awesome. What more can I say. Loved the voice, l...

2010-01-29T14:23:11.995-05:00

Awesome. What more can I say. Loved the voice, loved everything.

I know it's easy to say, but you really did pa...

2010-01-29T14:21:14.257-05:00

I know it's easy to say, but you really did pack in so much into a very short piece. gave us Billy's backstory, what he did, how we was discovered and how he became famous tonight. and to then make it such an entertaining read is very impressive.